My term 4 writing moderation.

Emma Smith

Lc13

Riverdale School

20^th October 2010

Ideas-

I slipped. OWWW. Oh no. BRRRRRR.

‘Wait for me Patrick’. I called as I climbed the sand dunes.

‘NO’. He called. ‘Fine then’ I said.

Once I had climbed the first sand dune I sore him sliding down one. At once I hurried

Because I didn’t want to be left behind. As I got to the sand dune,

He had slided down I saw he was at the bottom waving to me.

‘Hi’ he said. As I waved back to him I leaned over a bit to far

And suddenly the sand from behind me moved and I slipped and fell.

‘AHH’ I screamed as I slided down the sand dune. But you’ll never guess

What I was safe because as I slided down a net stopped me.

‘Phew’ I whispered as I climbed up to the top. I saw my brother yell to me ’Are you ok’. I yelled out ‘yeah’. I decided to be more careful because

I really didn’t want to hurt myself because I have never broken

Any bones. I decided to pick another sand dune to climb and I picked a smaller one and one with a net of course. I really wanted to have a sliding

Contest but again no more climbing for me for a while oh well.

‘BRRRRRR’ went a car. ‘AHHHHH’. I screamed and fell down the sand dune

But there was no net so of course I kept rolling but luckily I wasn’t

Hurt. This time my brother just laughed and rolled down the hill

Himself and practically landed on me.